Dream II – The Ghazal Series
This is the second version of the first ghazal I posted a few weeks ago. The encouraging reception I have received to poems I have posted has encouraged me to work on putting together a book. So, any constructive criticism is welcome at any time.
Savor soft sweet taste of delight in a dream
mind’s eye receives a joyous sight but a dream.
From birth to death one strives to achieve success
every effort a flight to fulfill a dream.
Alone and agonized the artist works for years
to create a work that ignites many to dream.
Are these visions that descend within the dark?
Or are the actions in stark light the real dream?
Words fail to capture treasured moments of bliss
though Skywalker invites you into her dream.
Thank you for sharing your dream!
No critique here. That was great. And I’m not blowing smoke, because I’m not a big poetry person for a reason: Most of them just bounce off my thick skull. Your poems have a musical rhythm, which is probably why I can connect with them.
Thanks, your feedback is always helpful.
Great take on dreams. I love these lines: “To create a work that ignites many to dream”;”Are these visions that descend with the dark.”
PS nothing jumped out at me.