Which version of this poem, Meditation, is the best?
Usually when I revise a poem, I see it as much better than an earlier version, however, as I looked at this poem, I could not decide which is better. So, dear readers, I would appreciate receiving in your comments which one you think is best, #1, originally written in 2002 or #2 revised in 20ll. Thanks for your assistance.
#1. Ghazal 6 – Meditation
Quiet are the black hours of meditation
starlight and moon cower before meditation.
She dreamed flights of fretless singing when young.
Some find a voice of power through their meditation.
A New Year tosses arid thoughts on barren sand
I seek to experience the flower bloom of meditation.
Hold tight the ambrosial sweetness of emptiness.
Wealth fails to tower over ernest meditation.
Dakinis write scripts that make the mountains cry.
Skywalker seeks to devour time with meditation.
Quiet drinks liquid hours of meditation
stars and sun cower before meditation.
She dreamed flights of abandoned singing when young
now showers melody in meditation.
New Year tosses arid thoughts on barren sand
seek to smell the flower of meditation.
Relish ambrosial sweetness of emptiness
wealth fails to tower over meditation.
Dakinis write scripts to make strong mountains cry
Skywalker devours time with meditation.